February 28, 2008

A Story by Tobin

Tobin caught wind of the fact that Charis was typing her language arts assignment on the computer. He wondered why HE didn't get to type a story on the computer. I told him if he sat down and wrote out a story, I would let him type it out. Amazingly, he immediately got a piece of handwriting paper, wrote out a story, then informed me he was ready!

Below is his story, completely typed out on his own. I taught him how to do capital letters, and the only correction I made was to add a "b" in "grabbed." (He saw the red squiggly line underneath "grabed" and asked why the line was there, so I told him.) He did add a few sentences once he was at the keyboard, but overall, I was impressed with his writing process, and he's pretty proud of himself, too!

Oh, and one final note: "The hero of times" apparently is something from a video game he has played at a friend's house. I think the sentence with 3 mentions of the hero may be a great review of what pronouns are and why we use them! LOL

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Once up on a time there lived a monster in a cave. When it saw people a hand came out and grabbed people and ate them. One day the hero of times came to fight the monster. It almost ate the hero of times but before it could eat the hero of times the hero of times cut off head with sword. Then people had a party. They were glad the monster was dead. While they were partying the hero of times went away and never came back.

The end from tobin

3 comments:

Bob & Claire said...

LOL about the "hero of the times" and no pronouns! It reminds me of the Schoolhouse Rock pronoun song--

Now, I have a friend named Rufus Xavier Sarsaparilla,
And I could say that Rufus found a kangaroo
That followed Rufus home
And now that kangaroo belongs
To Rufus Xavier Sarsaparilla.
Whew! I could say that, but I don't have to,
'Cause I got pronouns,
I can say, "HE found a kangaroo that followed HIM home and now IT is HIS"

And so on . . . Cute story!

Amos said...

Wow, I am impressed! Great job typing it all Tobin, what a great story. I read it to my Logan and you could just see his little wheels turning thinking about it.

J.E. Jacobson said...

Haha. What a great story Tobin. I like the Hero of the Times. He's a pretty cool cat. The monster of course is very scary since it's a man-eating monster. Keep writing stories; it's the coolest thing ever.